Wow. Such a sad piece, it stings like a thousand winters. Great idea starting and ending in contradictions. (Loved/unloved, touched/untouched, etc) you flow quite nicely into the scene of weeping. The second stanza is so bitter with the lines "I cry and go unnoticed & I love and go unmentioned" Such a feeling of solitude.

The third stanza seems as if you are fighting against the journey so far. You (Your Character) seems to be taking a stand against the relationship so far. The reader is perplexed to as why unitl the fourth stanza when you reveal that the two of you have equally hurt each other. And how looking back you barely recognize the person he has become.

Bravo Steph. This is quite good. I find myself at a loss of words at it's quality.

If you are experiencing these emotions then I am sorry and hope and pray for your happiness.

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Thank you for your in depth comment. I haven't written in so long I really think some feed back is probably exactly what I need. I am glad you think it is of a good quality. And thank you for the well wishes.

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That jester guys is into it.

I enjoyed the "that all the hurt you feel
is just you forgetting me" DEEP..

I feel ya on this one tho. Im gonna go write.

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When I was just a little child,
'Appiness was there awhile.
Then from me it slipped one day:
'Appiness, come back, I say,
Bob Marley

Thanks. It's pretty simple but yet I think that's all I can make it for now.

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