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my prescription by ~callowness:iconcallowness:





this is what the doctor ordered:
"take the blue ones first,
the red ones last,
and 3 of the yellow in between."

coughing blood, a broken knee,
ripped intestines for all to see.
gouged out eyes, and a broken heart.
I can't remember is it yellow to start?

"your heart is swollen from all the pain.
if you take the red first, you'll go insane.
the blue ones are healing, the yellow to calm,
yet, a combination could act as napalm."

my eyes are bleeding, my chest, it aches.
I heard the green pills were only fakes,
meant to sooth a broken heart,
yet, all the while I’m falling apart.

this is what the doctor ordered:
"the orange first to kill the pain,    
then a lethal injection to end the day.
if it isn’t instant then, just to be sure,
I’ll give you the pink, and there’s your cure."
©2007-2008 ~callowness
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~jester81:iconjester81: Feb 11, 2007, 2:22:14 PM
Interesting piece on the overmedication of todays populace. It has a good flow. Well done.

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~musashi2476:iconmusashi2476: Feb 13, 2007, 4:32:22 PM
I like how you used the rhyming couplets to pull the reader through. Good writing.

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~callowness:iconcallowness: Feb 13, 2007, 10:38:12 PM
Thank you, so much.

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~musashi2476:iconmusashi2476: Feb 14, 2007, 4:08:38 AM
You're quite welcome.

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